Wednesday, April 1, 2009

ESSAY IN CLASS !

We shape our identities through our action that I am convinced that I agree with it and people need to have action to prove something. It is a fantastic way to shape our own identities. People who have all kinds of identities and no one can be the same. In the mean time, I support to use action that expresses my own identities.

When I study in middle school, I would like to get a job to help the student. The first thing, I should get into the student union. It is the fastest way that can make my wish to be true. Therefore, I prepare to the election. Miss cui she did not want to me to get into the student union. She convinced that I did not have enough ability to help the student and some school work. I am so glare that I am convinced that I need an opportunity to get a position in student union. I started to think about how can I prove my own identities that can make miss cui trust me. Clean the classroom after class? I am not sure that my action can be like a model. I did not want to act something that show to people. Finally, I deicide to student to go the old people who lived in a common place. i am convinced that can make my classmate t o understand the old people live position. my classmates feel they should pay more attention for old people. they would like to give love for their grand ma and grandfather. i am convinced that i did an excellent work and i use my action to prove my ability. not only clean the classroom , but also to make my classmate to understand the old people live position. miss cui have nothing to say for me, because i did good job on my own responsibility. finally, i get my a position in student union. i enjoy my job and i would like to get more opportunity to work for student.

we shape our identities through our action that it can totally express my own identities. use action that help me and prove my ability. i agree with that shape our identities through our action.

1 comment:

  1. 3.5/6

    Good effort! I see what you are trying to say...but work on developing stronger ideas. Your ideas are straightforward, but a little simple. Try to make it more exciting! There are many sentence and grammar errors that need to be fixed. Also, watch your use of vocabulary words.

    Print this out if you can and we can go over it at school.

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